I see a few issues with your response. First, you don’t include any sources, and adding at least one would show that your information comes from a trusted website rather than personal opinion. Second, you assume readers understand how federal funding affects athletic programs. It would be more convincing if you included concrete numbers or details about what portion of aid comes from federal funds. Finally, it’s not clear how freezing $2.2 billion would impact Harvard’s 40 Division I teams.